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sound
is her name

spoken
by the march of languid blinks
in accord, with dreams
descending
as the darkness folds across me
to break my solemn countenance
and nothing fades
because

colour
is her eyes

drawn
forever in me,
tied with elegance
across all dreams
that I will always hold to
as a granted wish
in clear knowledge that,

taste
is her lips

locked
in their circumference
of breath in breath entwined
by movement like the fall of leaves
that gently break
the icy surface of the world
in which I lie awake
enough to feel

touch
is her embrace

held
closer just to hear her heart
that calls me to her arms
locked gently
in reflection with my thoughts
that now withstand attrition of
closed eyes, each

breath
is her closeness

here
in the company of smiles
born at the thought of her whisper
and I will wait for dawn longer
for she is the light
I wish so much
that morning is another compliment
to her sweet face
so near

as I wake

and know


beauty
is her -
in every form
Written for Daria, at 3.05am Sunday morning. While dueling with sleep and listening to a song she likes
:) (Smile)
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poetic-abortion Featured By Owner Dec 19, 2004
very very beautiful.
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julyshelied Featured By Owner Aug 1, 2004
and beauty is your writing

I love it
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SimpleFlaw Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2004
Welcome to Carly's favourites :boogie:
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spaddy Featured By Owner Feb 1, 2004
an elgant beautiful piece
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acidicpyxie Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2004
wow I found that while I read this.....that in between the grinning I caught myself holding my breath. the way you've chosen to phrase the words, the breaking up of the stanzas with the short lines....I love that. This is really a wonderful piece of writing. Sorry I don't have something more interesting to say but i'm not really qualified to critique or whatnot lol
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ignite Featured By Owner Feb 13, 2003  Professional Artist
this fucking blew me away.
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deadsumo Featured By Owner Dec 5, 2002  Professional Photographer
whos the girl? she must be quite something! great imagery thief :D (Big Grin) cya
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siedhr Featured By Owner Dec 4, 2002  Student Writer
what a beautiful poem, delicate yet passionate. she's a lucky girl.:) (Smile) it is intimate, but it does not give the reader the sensation of voyeurism.
I love the simplicity, the way the stanzas connect, the whole just flows gently, yes i believe gentleness is the best way I could describe this poem.
"and I will wait for dawn longer
for she is the light"
a most eloquent way to say those sadly worn out words(in poetry that is) I love you. the way time changes when the right person is by your side.
+fav
and devwatch.
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titania Featured By Owner Dec 2, 2002
this is genuine, that's what makes it wonderful.

Titania
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gaston Featured By Owner Nov 19, 2002
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how wonderful this poetry is.
the eloquence flows from line to line and appropriately delivers a romantic aura involving all five senses - redefined and transcended from a mere biological function to the most perfect manifestation of life in your eyes - her.

most people can create romantic poetry;
yet only a few can create romantic poetry that goes beyond a mere expression of cheesy sentiments and superficial tingling of the senses. those few brilliant poets can transform the strange manifestation of romance into something profound, invigorating, and just wonderfully refreshing that a reader comes to long for similar sentiments the poet expresses.

this is most certainly a hasty generalization, but i think you're one of 'em poets.

thanks for sharing this beautiful work.

peace.
+g

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